I really liked the way you included direct speech in your writing this week, Lachlan. Starting a new line each time someone spoke made it much easier for me as a reader to follow the conversation.
I hadn’t noticed the cat in the picture before you mentioned it. How did the cat get splashed? Did it fall in the fountain or did the sprinklers come on to water the flowers?
I really liked the way you included direct speech in your writing this week, Lachlan. Starting a new line each time someone spoke made it much easier for me as a reader to follow the conversation.
I hadn’t noticed the cat in the picture before you mentioned it. How did the cat get splashed? Did it fall in the fountain or did the sprinklers come on to water the flowers?
You have done a lot of “showing” rather than “telling” in the story, Lachlan. This made it exciting to read. Well done.