Once there was a harbour and inside the harbour there was a giant mountain.
Inside the mountain there were loads of houses.
Then one day a giant fire dragon came to the mountain but luckily there was a brave boy with an ice sword.
Then the brave boy ran down the hill with his ice sword and made a blizzard.
The blizzard was getting so cold so the fire dragon got frozen and that was the end of the fire dragon.
I like your story but where did the dragon come from?
I like your punctuation
I like how you used a dragon and a brave boy who had a snow sword next time can you make a nonfiction story.
Andrew I like the fire dragon and the brave boy nice work!! 😎🤩😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎
I actually really enjoyed it I also loved the dragon 🐉
This is a much better comment, Cassian. You have given useful feedback that will help us all to become better writers. This time your emoji adds to your message.