The sky was a perfect powder blue and the tour boat was about to go down the river. Then Shadow’s best friend, Bronte finally ran to the tour boat. Once she made it onto the boat, she turned to her friend and said, “Thank you for inviting me to England.” They live in Brisbane city and they are neighbours but they have not ever been to England. They were very excited about going to England and this was the trip of their dreams.
Your opening words paint a perfect picture of the sky in my mind. It makes me want to read on. You have punctuated with quotation marks correctly, which isn’t always easy to do.
I love your descriptive words to set the scene for the reader!
Great scene setting. Sounds like an awesome adventure is ahead.