One summer’s day in Greenville a new garden centre opened and everybody rushed in, including cats. Plants, flowers and pots were on sale everywhere. There was an example of a delightful garden and there was even a real house with plants. There were lots of children, big ones and small ones and of course, most of them wanted something from the gift shop. Most people stayed the whole day and it got an award for being the best garden centre ever.
I am very impressed with the way that you have used commas in your writing to help you make longer, more interesting sentences. Without the commas, it might be difficult for the reader to make sense of what you are describing, but because of your punctuation, your writing is enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing your writing.
What beautiful descriptions Emma!
Wow Emma. Beautiful writing and I am so proud of you!
You are able to add a lot of detail in your writing because you are using conjunctions in your sentences. Great writing, Emma.