Once a lady was on holiday and she was staying at a hotel. She stayed near a lake that had three types of boats you could rent for free. She planned to rent a motor boat because she had two great friends that were twins even though they were a boy and a girl. It was their birthdays today and they loved boats big and small. She had planned to surprise them at the harbour and would take them in the boat and luckily it was a sunny day with swans about.
Wow, Emma! What a fantastic first entry in the Five Sentence Challenge. You really managed to pack a lot of ideas into just five sentences.
You really thought about your readers and included interesting details that gave them background information about the characters. I enjoyed reading about the lady and her plans to rent a boat to take out with her friends. That sounds like a great way to celebrate a birthday.
Have you ever been on a boat like these ones?
I enjoyed reading your post. Well done.
I really enjoyed reading your story and I didn’t want it to end. You have mastered writing complex sentences very well. You may like to explore the use of commas for next time. Well done.
Emma, you have written with lovely detail and description. I had no trouble imagining your characters and the surrounding setting. Packed full of information! Well done.
What a great birthday surprise. Well done.
I loved reading your story and can’t believe how many details you have included in just 5 sentences !