Once there was a milkman that delivered milk to you.
One day the milkman stopped at the cafe to deliver milk to a lady.
The lady said thank you and the milkman continue on his way.
And on his way he sore the postman and asked if he had any mail in his bag for the milkman and the postman said no so the milkman continue on his way.
So the postman went to the cafe and and gave mail to the lady and continue on
His way.
I enjoyed reading your story, Dante. You made a bit of a pattern by repeating the same phrases over and over. A lot of good writers do this in their writing, especially in fairytales and picture books.
You might need to check your spelling in your fourth sentence. You have used “sore” which is the word to use if something hurts. Do you know a homophone for this word?
You have a lovely flow to your writing. I particularly liked the phrase, “continued on his way”. I can picture the characters going about their daily duties.
I have loved reading your writing again, Dante. I can see you are thinking about writing with detail and description. All of your sentences have flowed beautifully. You are a writer!
I was left wondering “what will happen next?”. Who will the postman find when he continues on his way? I like a story that makes me think about it well after it’s finished. Well done Dante.