One summer morning the lady who looked after the village tea rooms was waiting for some milk but just then the mailman came and gave her a letter. Then she opened the letter it said miss Friday you get a vacation. she was so so so so happy . The next Thursday she was packing and getting ready for her vacation. she was going to Fiji for 5 weeks .
I enjoyed reading your story because you included some ideas that made me really want to know what might happen next. Hooking in your readers with interesting plots is a very good writing skill.
In your second sentence, I got a bit confused by the words you used. I wondered if you meant “next Friday” instead of “miss Friday”. It is important to read over your work to check in case words are mixed up. This makes it easier for your readers to know what you mean.
I’m very excited for Miss Friday. She must have worked very hard to earn a vacation. I wonder what made you call her “Miss Friday”.
I liked how you used lots of information.I did not understand miss Friday did you mean Miss Friday.
I like the word fiji
I like your idea of the photo Abigail.
I enjoy reading your writing, Abigail as you think creatively about your ideas and write with interesting description.