There are some people in their boats that are fishing. People are admiring the view from the top hotel floor.The birds are eating the tasty fish.The trees are beautiful .There are many people in boats traveling to places and they have a good view.
There are some people in their boats that are fishing. People are admiring the view from the top hotel floor.The birds are eating the tasty fish.The trees are beautiful .There are many people in boats traveling to places and they have a good view.
You have used some great adjectives to describe the scene. Try using your adjectives to “show” rather than “tell” about the picture? For example, The trees swayed gently in the breeze and glowed with autumn colours. Great editing.
I liked your description, Lachlan. I wonder if you could come up with an adventure from this scene?
I’m wondering who the people on the top hotel floor may be and why they are there. Hmmmm.