One summer afternoon the swans were gliding, the trees were swaying and the birds were chirping. A family was going fishing on this little yellow boat . The summer air made some people feel hungry. Lots of people were ordering for delicious afternoon tea. Soon it will get dark and most people will pack up to go home.
Wow, I love your opening sentence. I can picture the day perfectly. You have edited your writing very well and I like how you have used some interesting adjectives.
Lovely descriptive words. They created a wonderful picture and a calm feeling. I wanted your story to continue so I could keep enjoying your writing.
I agree that your opening sentence is great. I feel like I was transported to the lake, hearing the sounds and smelling the food.